Leads #4
Smoking Wheels
Forty passengers were evacuated today from Northwest Airlines Flight 428, coming from Minneapolis to LaCrosse, Wisconsin.
The evacuation was mandated after a landing tower employee noticed smoke near the wheels.
Missing Boy
A 7-year-old boy was found Monday night in Brick Township, N.J., after having been missing for three years.
After the movie, Adam: The Song Continues, that aired Monday night, a neighbor immediately recognized the missing child’s picture when it appeared on the screen. Police arrived shortly after, placing Ellen Lynn Conner, 27, under arrest under charges of kidnapping and interfering with a custody warrant.
Leads #5
Fact Set #1: Pipe fitter
Delayed Identification:
A 55-year-old pipe fitter employed by Gross Engineers in Springfield, suffered third-degree burns yesterday when he was installing new pipes on the roof of the Springfield Municipal Power Plant.
Immediate Identification:
At 3 p.m. yesterday, Duane La Chance, a 55-year-old pipe fitter from Springfield was admitted to the hospital after suffering third-degree burns atop the roof of the Springfield Municipal Power Plant.
Fact Set #2: Car accident
Delayed Identification:
At 11:45 a.m. today, two men, ages 19, and 20, got into a head on collision when one of their vehicles crossed the center line on U.S. 63, just North of Blue Ridge Road.
Immediate Identification:
Today at 11:45 a.m., James W. Cunning, age 20, was admitted to the hospital in satisfactory condition when Wayne Clay, age 19, crossed the center line and hit James’ 2005 Ford Focus on U.S. 63.
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Smoking Wheels: Combine your first two sentences into one, and you've got a lead. (The flight number and where the flight originated belong in paragraph 2.)
Missing Boy: Tighten it up and get a bit of the "how" into your lead; it's interesting.
A 7-year-old boy, missing for three years, was found in Brick Township, N.J., Monday night after a neighbor recognized his picture on television. (You can explain about the movie in P2)
Pipe Fitter: Good, except I don't need to know his employer in the lead. However, I might want to know he's a local guy ("a Springfield pipe fitter...") more than I want to know his age.
Immed. ID: Don't start with your lead with the "when" or "where" of a story. Start with the most important and/or interesting info, generally the "who" and/or "what" of the story. And focus on the accident, not his condition. That can come in P2, after you've gotten me interested in what happened.
Car Accident: Don't start with the "when." Ask yourself what makes this story newsworthy -- for example, a simple car accident isn't news, but when someone is seriously injured in a car accident, it is. So focus on the fact that a local guy was injured in a two-car accident.
Leads 4: B+
Leads 5: B
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